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Coming back
Time and time
Again,
Like a puppet
Bound to  
Short strings,
Controlled by the
Forever hands
Of the Marionette-
Master of Time.

Coming back
Time and time
Again,
Like a character
Caught in the
Circuses enchanted
Hall of Mirrors
Where every reflection
Can be True
But is instead- False.

Coming back
Time and time
Again,
Like a Song
Repeating in the
Listener’s mind
Until all other
Thoughts are
Quickly overlapped
And- Encompassed.

Coming back
Time and time
Again,
And again
And again,
Until all Time
Begins to loop,
Caught eternally
In the Midnight throes
Of - Again.

And always
Coming back.
©2008-2009 *Silvercharmed
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This was written for a contest hosted by :iconwriteaway: .

The prompt was - Addiction.

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~forWinds:iconforWinds: Jul 15, 2008, 6:49:22 AM
You definitely nailed the prompt with this, I must say. :) Good job!

--
(Do illiterate people get the full effect of Alphabet soup?)
All those who believe in telekinesis, raise my hand.
Smile, and the world will smile with you. Laugh and they'll all think you're on drugs.
*Silvercharmed:iconSilvercharmed: Jul 15, 2008, 10:16:34 AM
I hope it wasnt too much repetition, i was a little nervous about it.
Thanks though!
:rose:

--
Stand too close to the edge,
And pretend for just a moment that
You can fly
Loose your balance and trip.
Will anyone remember that this is where you fell?
~My-Lucid-Dream:iconMy-Lucid-Dream: Jul 23, 2008, 8:42:24 AM
I actually quite liked the repetition. This poem for me is about taking addiction and exploring one interesting element of it, like making a particular observation rather than trying to tackle the whole concept. I think it's a lot more interesting because of that. Addiction IS about repetition, doing the same thing over and over 'til it just makes you weary, but still you do it. Nice imagery in here too.

--
The Bond
*Silvercharmed:iconSilvercharmed: Jul 23, 2008, 5:09:45 PM
Thank you so much. Im glad that the repetition is being taken the way i intended, and i very much appreciate your thoughts. I wondered if it was going to make sense. heh.

--
Stand too close to the edge,
And pretend for just a moment that
You can fly
Loose your balance and trip.
Will anyone remember that this is where you fell?
~ForsakenProdigy:iconForsakenProdigy: Aug 4, 2008, 4:23:44 PM
I have to agree with ~My-Lucid-Dream about the repetition. It adds to the poem rather than taking away from it. You get caught up in the repetition like addicts get caught up in their addictions, to the point where anything else that might be going on around them is an afterthought. Very well done and original!
*Silvercharmed:iconSilvercharmed: Aug 5, 2008, 9:18:15 PM
Thank you so very much! :hug:

--
Stand too close to the edge,
And pretend for just a moment that
You can fly
Loose your balance and trip.
Will anyone remember that this is where you fell?
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